Copy for Paragraph Analysis 2

In the following post, I will edit and analyze my own paragraphs.

phantomswife. "Writing." 08/17/2012 via Flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic License. 

You can find a copy of my paragraph analysis here.

My paragraphs were not well-developed at all, so I added a lot more to them. They all had a main topic sentence, but didn't do much of anything else. I had some time to edit it, so I made strong revisions.